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-**AxaMonitor** reached out to the writer who launched a daily blog critiquing the //Axanar// script recently leaked by former chief technologist Terry McIntosh.+**AxaMonitor** reached out to the writer who launched a daily blog critiquing the //Axanar// script recently [[script_release|leaked]] by former chief technologist Terry McIntosh. 
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 +<wrap lo>//See also: [[locked_script|The 'Locked' Axanar Screenplay: A Review]]//</wrap>
  
 The site, [[https://axanarsporking.wordpress.com|Axanar: The Sporkings]], walks through the screenplay daily, roughly a scene at a time, commenting on the script producer [[Alec Peters]] called "fully revised and locked" just before he was [[lawsuit|sued]] by Star Trek's owners for [[copyright_infringement]]. The site, [[https://axanarsporking.wordpress.com|Axanar: The Sporkings]], walks through the screenplay daily, roughly a scene at a time, commenting on the script producer [[Alec Peters]] called "fully revised and locked" just before he was [[lawsuit|sued]] by Star Trek's owners for [[copyright_infringement]].
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 +The writer, who goes by the pseudonym Kate Stark on Facebook, takes aim at fundamental weaknesses in the script by Peters and screenwriter [[hunt_peters|Bill Hunt]], himself a critic of Peters' [[hunt peters|lack]] of film production experience.
  
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 <wrap lo>According to Wikipedia, a "[[wp>Mary Sue]] is an idealized and seemingly perfect fictional character. Often this character is recognized as an author insert or wish-fulfillment." (([[wp>**AxaMonitor**: |Wikipedia entry]] on "Mary Sue," retrieved 6/28/17.))</wrap> <wrap lo>According to Wikipedia, a "[[wp>Mary Sue]] is an idealized and seemingly perfect fictional character. Often this character is recognized as an author insert or wish-fulfillment." (([[wp>**AxaMonitor**: |Wikipedia entry]] on "Mary Sue," retrieved 6/28/17.))</wrap>
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-The writer, who goes by the pseudonym Kate Stark on Facebook, takes aim at fundamental weaknesses in the script by Peters and screenwriter [[hunt_peters|Bill Hunt]], himself a critic of Peters' [[hunt peters|lack]] of film production experience. 
  
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-The most glaring, Stark writes, is Peters' making the role Garth of Izar, portrayed by Peters, a "Mary Sue" — a perfect character, vociferously and voluminously admired by all the other characters, who can do no wrong.+The most glaring, Stark writes, is Peters' making the role Garth of Izar, who can do no wrong as portrayed by Peters, a "Mary Sue" — a perfect character, vociferously and voluminously admired by all the other characters.
  
 Stark consented to answer some questions about her blog project, and what she's learned from reading the leaked script that was reportedly only 30 days away from filming when the lawsuit shut down production. Stark consented to answer some questions about her blog project, and what she's learned from reading the leaked script that was reportedly only 30 days away from filming when the lawsuit shut down production.
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 +===== Critique Experience =====
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 +**AxaMonitor**: You said on Facebook that you "cut your teeth" reading (and critiquing, presumably) Harry Potter, Lord of the Rings and Star Trek fan fiction. What was it about that writing that compelled you to learn the art of critique? \\
 +**Kate Stark**: There were a lot of reasons I got started with fan fiction. First, I was reading a lot of fan fiction. It was how we engaged with franchises we loved, particularly while waiting for the next installment. \\ \\
 +Second, there were existing communities. I was able to find people from whom I could learn and with whom I could share.  Finally, fan fiction was accessible. You didn't need a graduate degree in literature to understand it, and the mistakes were exaggerated enough that they were easy for a novice critic to spot.
  
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 <wrap indent>However, the dog watch does not refer to the “earliest hours of the morning.” That’s midwatch or, perhaps, the first hour of the morning watch. The dog watches cover the afternoon to evening (1600 to 1800 and 1800 to 2000).</wrap></wrap> (([[https://axanarsporking.wordpress.com/2017/07/08/hounded-by-poor-research/|"Admire the Sue," Axanar: The Sporkings]], Kate Stark, 7/8/17.)) <wrap indent>However, the dog watch does not refer to the “earliest hours of the morning.” That’s midwatch or, perhaps, the first hour of the morning watch. The dog watches cover the afternoon to evening (1600 to 1800 and 1800 to 2000).</wrap></wrap> (([[https://axanarsporking.wordpress.com/2017/07/08/hounded-by-poor-research/|"Admire the Sue," Axanar: The Sporkings]], Kate Stark, 7/8/17.))
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-===== Critique Experience ===== 
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-**AxaMonitor**: You said on Facebook that you "cut your teeth" reading (and critiquing, presumably) Harry Potter, Lord of the Rings and Star Trek fan fiction. What was it about that writing that compelled you to learn the art of critique? \\ 
-**Kate Stark**: There were a lot of reasons I got started with fan fiction. First, I was reading a lot of fan fiction. It was how we engaged with franchises we loved, particularly while waiting for the next installment. \\ \\ 
-Second, there were existing communities. I was able to find people from whom I could learn and with whom I could share.  Finally, fan fiction was accessible. You didn't need a graduate degree in literature to understand it, and the mistakes were exaggerated enough that they were easy for a novice critic to spot. 
  
 **AxaMonitor**: You said that these days you primarily critique published fiction. Do you do it professionally at all, or as an interested amateur? In what forums do you do that these days? What kind of debate/arguments do you find you get into? Are you seeing any of the same kinds of issues arising as you go through Axanar? \\ **AxaMonitor**: You said that these days you primarily critique published fiction. Do you do it professionally at all, or as an interested amateur? In what forums do you do that these days? What kind of debate/arguments do you find you get into? Are you seeing any of the same kinds of issues arising as you go through Axanar? \\
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 During the heyday of fan fiction critiques, you got a massive amount of drama.  Most of us were teens, after all, and still developing a thick skin with respect to our work. Now, there's substantially less drama.  It's very much like what you see with the Axanar Facebook groups. You have supporters in one group, critics in another, and they may occasionally snipe at each other, but there's little discussion. To my mind, that's unfortunate. Any work of art, whether skilled or unskilled, can invite multiple interpretations and the world is a better place through the discussion of them. During the heyday of fan fiction critiques, you got a massive amount of drama.  Most of us were teens, after all, and still developing a thick skin with respect to our work. Now, there's substantially less drama.  It's very much like what you see with the Axanar Facebook groups. You have supporters in one group, critics in another, and they may occasionally snipe at each other, but there's little discussion. To my mind, that's unfortunate. Any work of art, whether skilled or unskilled, can invite multiple interpretations and the world is a better place through the discussion of them.
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 +//**__« What surprised me about the script is that I think it would have been a fun fan film had it been produced. »__**// //<wrap indent>— Screenplay critic Kate Stark</wrap>//
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 ==== 'Very Happy' Critiquing 'Axanar' ==== ==== 'Very Happy' Critiquing 'Axanar' ====
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 **AxaMonitor**: Has the script surprised you, either pleasantly or otherwise? \\ **AxaMonitor**: Has the script surprised you, either pleasantly or otherwise? \\
-**Stark**: What surprised me about the script is that I think it would have been fun fan film had it been produced.+**Stark**: What surprised me about the script is that I think it would have been a fun fan film had it been produced.
  
 ==== 'Axanar' Lite ==== ==== 'Axanar' Lite ====
  
-**AxaMonitor**: How good are the prospects for Axanar Lite™ as a shortened version of this story in the faux documentary format of Prelude to Axanar? \\+**AxaMonitor**: How good are the prospects for [[Axanar Lite]]™ as a shortened version of this story in the faux documentary format of Prelude to Axanar? ((The lawsuit settlement allows Peters to make two 15-minute episodes comprising the //Axanar// story; he must do so without any public crowdfunding.)) \\
 **Stark**: One of the consistent weaknesses in //Axanar// is that the script favors telling over showing.  The faux documentary format of //Prelude// will turn that weakness into a strength.  Additionally, I don't see any challenge in fitting the Axanar story into thirty minutes.  The [version] 7.3 script is inflated by constant repetition, frequently we get the same information from both the Starfleet and Klingon perspectives. **Stark**: One of the consistent weaknesses in //Axanar// is that the script favors telling over showing.  The faux documentary format of //Prelude// will turn that weakness into a strength.  Additionally, I don't see any challenge in fitting the Axanar story into thirty minutes.  The [version] 7.3 script is inflated by constant repetition, frequently we get the same information from both the Starfleet and Klingon perspectives.
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 +<wrap lo>**DOWNLOAD** the [[face>download/preview/1862772583974620|Axanar script]] Alec Peters described in August 2015 as "fully revised and locked." (You may need to be logged for this link in the Files section of the [[face>groups/AxaMonitor|AxaMonitor Facebook]] page to work properly.)</wrap>
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 === Kharn the Undying === === Kharn the Undying ===
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 **AxaMonitor**: Given the loss of Richard Hatch and therefore no Kharn appearances to any appreciable degree in Axanar Lite™, how much does that threaten the integrity of the story? \\ **AxaMonitor**: Given the loss of Richard Hatch and therefore no Kharn appearances to any appreciable degree in Axanar Lite™, how much does that threaten the integrity of the story? \\
 **Stark**: Chang shares almost all of Kharn's scenes.  The character could easily impart the same information, thus maintaining the integrity of the story. **Stark**: Chang shares almost all of Kharn's scenes.  The character could easily impart the same information, thus maintaining the integrity of the story.
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 ===== Salvaging 'Axanar'? ===== ===== Salvaging 'Axanar'? =====
  
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-[{{ ::tampaxanar.jpg?nolink&200|**MIGHT** Sporkings' pseudonymous Kate Stark actually be Axanar parodist TampAxanar?}}]+[{{ ::tampaxanar.jpg?nolink&200|**MIGHT** Axanar: The Sporkings' "Kate Stark" actually be infamous Twitter parodist [[twit>TampAxanar]]?}}]
  
 ===== Identity ===== ===== Identity =====
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 **AxaMonitor**: Finally, lucky question No. 13: Are you [[twit>tampaxanar|TampAxanar]], the parody version of Peters on Twitter? (I had to ask...) \\ **AxaMonitor**: Finally, lucky question No. 13: Are you [[twit>tampaxanar|TampAxanar]], the parody version of Peters on Twitter? (I had to ask...) \\
-**Stark**: I'm not that clever.+**Stark**: I'm not that clever. {{:axamonitor-ico.gif?nolink|}}
  
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 **Keywords** {{tag>Script Screenplay Alec_Peters Axanar}} **Keywords** {{tag>Script Screenplay Alec_Peters Axanar}}